Attendance and Comp Book Questions for Stephen Now that we are in project work time, it's critical that we communicate clearly with each other. This is time set aside for you to ask me questions about anything related to our project--timelines, deadlines, some content that you're not quite clear about, etc. Project Work Time
Today's Question: What sentences or phrases or words indicate your internal feelings and thoughts in your draft? We are officially in project work time! Woo hoo! Write, share, revise, take risks, conference, re-write,--be writers! Mini-lesson: Writing About Inner Thoughts and Feelings 1. Read and closely lines examine Richard Wright's, "The Rights to the Streets of Memphis." 2. Underline the main character's explicit thoughts ("I had the choice of being beaten....etc.) 3. Double underline statements that imply strong feelings ("I shook with fright.") (I've put these in bold text) 4. Read t She slammed the door and I heard the key turn in the lock. I shook with fright. I was alone upon the dark, hostile streets and gangs were after me. I had the choice of being beaten at home or away from home. I clutched the stick, crying, trying to reason. If I were beaten at home, there was absolutely nothing that I could do about it; but if I were beaten in the streets I had a chance to fight and defend myself. I walked slowly down the sidewalk, coming closer to the gang of boys, holding the stick tightly. I was so full of fear that I could scarcely breathe. I was almost upon them now. If you remove the passages that are explicit thoughts and imply the strong feelings of the hero, then we are left with: She slammed the door and I heard the key turn in the lock. I was alone upon the dark, hostile streets and gangs were after me. I was trying to reason, coming closer to the gang of boys. I was almost upon them now. These statements tell more about the character, his motivation, and his feelings. Such information makes the reading more appealing and more understandable. More understanding= more brain chemicals flowing (oxytocin and cortisol), and that's what you want to do in your stories! So, the question remains--what sentences or phrases or words indicate YOUR internal feelings and thoughts in your story right now? Chances are, you need to overhaul your stories in this way. Homework Think deeply about your story; work on your story.
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